Flash Fiction Friday: Jack and Nell

I had the idea for this story while involved in a forum conversation on how to mine meteorites for water.

Nell Abrams fidgeted in her seat. She glanced at her best friend and biggest rival, Jack Bole. His attention was riveted on their briefer and primary flight instructor, Andrew Knowles, standing in front of them.

“Remember, the gravity well is not your friend. Maneuvering will be difficult. Your flight plans look good. Keep it simple. Get into the atmosphere, land on the ocean, get the water, take off and get back here.” He looked at both of them. “Nell?”

She snapped her eyes back to front. “I’m good, Andrew. Keep it simple. Got it.”

“Jack?”

“Get the water and get back, yes sir.”

Nell jumped out of her seat. She was never good at the classroom stuff. She just couldn’t keep still. “Come on, Jack, we undock in an hour.”

He slowly unfolded from his seat. Where Nell was quick, sometimes dangerously impulsive, he was her exact opposite. He liked things orderly, well reasoned, and done by the book. “Keep your pants on, I’m coming.”

Nell took an elastic out of her flight suit pocket and began tying her hair into a pony tail. “Did your mom pick up the cake? Our graduation party is at 1900 hours.”

He stuck his hands in his pockets as he ambled along beside her, “Don’t you think we should get back with the water and finish our test before there’s a party?”

Nell smacked him in the arm. “Nothing’s going to go wrong. It’s a standard flight down to the planet for water.” She looked up at his grinning face, “Oh you’re a one, you are.” She smacked him again. “Mom is so proud, your mom too. Getting this chance to be pilots, good thing you kept after me about the math.”

She grew serious, “I never thanked you for that. Thank you. I’d be some waitress hoping for a couple of hours a week if you hadn’t kept on me about the school work.”

Jack put his arm around her shoulders, “No problem. What else would I do for my best friend? I’m just glad we have a chance to pull our families out of the Dispossessed and back into normal society.”

Nell nodded. There was a lot riding on their final, Master Pilot’s test today. She shook off the gloom. “And I’m going to beat your socks off.”

Jack laughed, taking back his arm. “That’ll be the day.”

They each boarded their ships, moving to the cockpits and running their undocking procedures. These were ships specially designed for going to the nearby planet and getting water. Since the station had no use for single use craft, they were also used to train pilots. Station control released them for undock, and both ships moved slowly away from the station.

It didn’t take long to get to the planet and Nell entered the atmosphere first. Jack entered a few moments later. Nell couldn’t resist a jab over the comms, “Hey, slowing down in your old age.”

“Don’t look now,” he replied.

She could see his ship passing her two hundred kilometers to her right. The ship began shuddering as it moved deeper into the gravity well. She noticed Jack’s ship drifting farther to the right.

“Jack? You’re drifting, what’s wrong?”

There was some static on the comms, “…thruster malfunction, switching to backups.”

Her ship continued to shudder as she followed Jack’s ship around the curvature of the planet. “Antique piece of crap,” she complained unconsciously as she moved through the atmosphere. “Jack, what’s your status?”

Again, atmospheric interference caused some static, but she heard, “Back up thrusters inoperative. Switching to…”

“Crap,” she whispered under her breath as she changed her thruster’s to follow Jack. “Jack! What’s your status?”

Jack replied, “Rebooting thruster programs, stand by.”

Nell chewed her lip. The planetary surface was only a couple hundred more miles. At this trajectory he’d be in the middle of the largest landmass, not the ocean. She reached for the comms button again, then took her hand back. Give him a minute, she thought. The screen showed his ship, a contrail now flowing out behind it. Come on, Jack, get it together.

She thought about all the years she and Jack ran wild through the corridors of TriPoint Station. How their parents got a deal on a teacher because the two of them would attend together. How his mom felt as much hers as her own mother.

The contrail shifted, she reached for the comms button. “Jack, what’s your status?”

“Reboot successful. All thrusters operational. Correcting flight path now.”

Nell began punching buttons, correcting her own flight path.

“Hey,” she heard over the comms. “You’re behind schedule there, Student Pilot Abrams. You’re going to lose!”

She punched the comms button, “The race isn’t over yet.”

They landed a hundred kilometers apart and Nell began taking in water almost before her engines stopped. The pumps seemed to take forever. She had her finger hovering over the cutoff switch as she watched the tank gauge creep to 100%. As soon as it hit the mark, she punched the button. Then there was a flurry of activity as she retracted hoses, closed hatches and with her other hand, began the take off sequence. She lifted off just seconds ahead of Jack.

She had to gloat, “Take that, slow poke!”

It was a race back, Nell coming into the dock just a little fast, Jack right behind her. Their instructor was on the dock waiting for them.

He was frowning as they came off the ramps and stopped in front of him. “Docking was too fast Abrams. Bole, nice recovery on the thruster malfunction.”

Nell and Jack stood absolutely still.

“Jack and Nell, you went down the well, to fetch a tank of water. Good job. You’ve earned your Master Pilot wings.”

The End

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Flash Fiction Friday: Names

I opened my browser up the other day and found a Yahoo news article about a couple who’d been told that the name they’d chosen for their child was not acceptable. I had to read that article of course. It turns out a lot of countries actually control the names parents are allowed to name their children. Well slap me silly! Here’s what I came up with.

Names

Guo and Nuan Lo stood proudly in the temple. It was Naming Day for their new daughter. The priest had the sacred oil ready; the mandatory government functionary was at Guo’s left. Friends and family were standing behind the couple. Naming Day gifts were on the table at the couple’s home, ready to open after the feast.
The priest lit the incense, chanting prayers to Guo’s and Nuan’s ancestors, calling them to witness the new name of the baby girl Nuan held in her arms. Nuan adjusted the tiny red cap the baby wore, matching her red silk dress and tiny baby shoes. She worried a little that the ancestors, or the majority of them anyway, were back on Earth. There were only two generations of ancestors here on New Peking. She hoped that was enough to bring luck to the new female.
The priest struck the alter bell three times, completing the ancestor summoning. Holding the bowl of sacred oil, he approached the couple. Nuan handed the baby to Guo, it was his responsibility to name the child.
Holding his oil covered thumb over the baby’s forehead, the priest asked, “What is the girl child’s name?”
Guo pulled his shoulders back and in a clear voice said, “Ixcheu.”
Nuan stiffened at the gasp from the audience. She saw her husband point his chin higher as the mouth of government man beside him dropped open.
He turned red. “You can’t name the baby that! That’s an alien name. Only Chinese names are authorized!”
Nuan blushed at the insult to their friend, Revik, at the back of the audience.
Her husband turned to the government man, “I have worked with the aliens for years. I have made many friends among them, one of them, Revik, my best friend. It is time to do that friendship honor. The child’s name shall be Ixcheu.” He faced the priest, “Her name is as I say.”
The priest looked to the government man.
The man grew red, “It is not authorized. Priest, name the girl, Yi, meaning Suitable.”
Nervously, the priest stepped forward, dabbed the girl with sacred oil on earlobes, forehead and chin, “You are named,” and as he said, “Yi,” Guo shouted, “Ixcheu.”
The audience gasped and began murmuring with their neighbors as the priest finished the rites. The parents, priest and government man stepped to the monitor to record the name. The government man forced his way to the monitor ahead of Guo, causing more audience comments over the bad manners of the man. He typed in Yi, and hit the send button, turning triumphantly to the parents.
“It is official, her name is Yi.” He bowed a micrometer to the parents, then a little deeper to the priest; and marched out of the temple.
Five years later, Yi, called Ixcheu, by her parents, came to class for the first time. Again, the teacher, maintaining colony custom, began by calling the girl, Yi. She refused to respond until the teacher called her Ixcheu. Thus, each year, the girl had a battle of wills with her new teacher and each year she won.
Upon her graduation from college, as a lawyer, her first action was to petition the government to change the law concerning naming conventions for the colony. By now, many children were in name limbo, their parents trying to honor alien friends and mentors but the government refused to relax the naming conventions.
Using all of those people as her base, she challenged the government. The day of the trial arrived.
In her closing argument she maintained, “Your honor, the time has passed for strict adherence to an archaic policy. I certainly understand the desire to maintain our traditional culture. However, it’s time to embrace the new culture, a mixed culture of human and alien. Mandatory naming conventions don’t strengthen our culture, it weakens our ties to the multi-cultural environment that exists today. It’s an insult to our alien, and to our non-Chinese human co-workers and friends.”
The government lawyer glared at her. She froze for a moment but gathered her resolve and continued. “My esteemed colleague,” she nodded to him, “contends that our heritage would be lost if we allowed other than traditional Chinese names. That it’s an affront to our ancestors to use non-Chinese or non-human names. I insist that it’s an honor to use these non-traditional names, an honor to the friends and co-workers among us who are not of Chinese ancestry.”
The judge pounded his gavel at the noise from the audience. “Quiet in the courtroom.”
Ixcheu took that time to sip some water. Her stomach was in a knot and her hands were sweaty. Once the courtroom settled down, she continued.
“Your honor, our history reports the concern our ancestors had about our heritage when we first arrived on New Peking. So many non-Chinese and aliens were among us, they thought our culture would be lost. I can appreciate that. But that was one hundred years ago. Nothing remains static, we must make allowances for changing social structures, not remain locked in a rigid system that refuses all change and growth. Please, Your Honor, allow the law to be changed.”
She sat down, the judge glaring at her. Finally he recessed the court until the next day. He’d give his judgment then.
Ixcheu spent the night with her family and friends examining the trial from every angle, trying to guess how the judge would rule.
The next day, the judge rapped the gavel on his stand once, and Ixcheu and the government representative rose. The judge looked between them, Ixcheu couldn’t read his face. She clenched and unclenched her fists, her stomach in knots. The judge took a deep breath and stared at Ixcheu.
“I rule in favor of the petitioner, Yi Lo, henceforth to be known, officially, as Ixcheu Lo.” He rapped his gavel and the courtroom erupted in cheers.

The End
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November 2012 National Novel Writing Month is Over!

Well, for me it is.  After a a long Thanksgiving weekend of daily word counts over what I’d been doing all month, yesterday I reached 50,347 words in my novel.  The goal is for each writer sit down and in one month, write at least 50,000 words.  This may seem like a foolish and unnecessary challenge.  Many writers think so, the thought of trying to write an entire novel in thirty days is terrifying, unnecessary, and the list goes on.

For me, this is how I started writing last year.  I was challenged, I figured out how to go about it, and I did it.  I spent January 2012 until the end of June 2012 learning how to revise a novel. And in early October 2012, I released that novel.  If you’re interested, you can find it on Amazon.com (The Bad Seed by Connie Cockrell).

I thought the whole thing was so positive, and I had such a good result that in August of 2012 I repeated the process, (project manager speak for I did it again, lol.) in what the organizers call Camp NaNo.  I finished a book that time too, which I still need to revise, probably beginning in January 2013.

This November, after plotting out my third book, I began with high hopes.  It didn’t go as well as my first two efforts.  I didn’t have enough scenes planned out to get me to my 50,000 word goal.  I did not give up.  Since my story location was on a space station (the book is tentatively titled TriPoint Station) I decided to fill out my 50,000 words (I was 15,000 words short) with short stories about life on the station.

This did two things.  It got me over the goal, making me happy.  It also allowed me to develop a good background about the station.  Things that may have been vaguely mentioned in the original story, or affected the story in some way, or had nothing to do with the original story but helped me develop a better idea of the station’s culture, legal system, economic reality, and so on.  I found this very helpful.

It pointed out flaws in my original story’s physical layout, naming conventions, it helped me develop a slang for the station and put in place a cultural bias, such as, names of the working class tend to remain Irish based (I had the station settled by Irish originally) while the rich tended to more New Age type names.

While I liked my original idea, I really liked getting into the nuts and bolts of my station.  I even added aliens, which I hadn’t even thought about in the original story.  So, that’s it.  I’ll have a lot of work to do to revise what I wrote in November.  There are a lot of continuity issues I’ll have to resolve along with adding an additional level of conflict.  That’s OK.  When I’m done, sometime around next June or July, I’ll start sending it out to SciFi publishers.

I can hardly wait.

Flash Fiction Friday: Lost Expedition

Here’s another instance of pulling a prompt from a list and coming up with a story.

Lost Expedition

“What do you mean you don’t want to go?  Why wouldn’t you want to rejoin the colony?”

“Aria, we appreciate the effort you went to, trying to find what you call the lost expedition.  But we’re not lost.”

Perplexed, Aria ran her hand through her hair, “Jacamo, we’ve wondered and worried the last hundred years about the expedition.  What happened to those twenty men and women?  When I found the clue in the archives, I had to mount a search.  We were so happy to find you.”

They were standing in the plaza of the alien city.  Aria and Jacamo were surrounded by descendents of those twenty explorers. They held themselves apart from the five members of Aria’s search party.  Not a long distance apart, but it was clear that there was a separation.

Jacamo nodded.  Aria fought the urge to pace.

“I appreciate that, Aria.  But when our forefathers, the lost expedition as you call it, crashed here the Wise Ones took them in.  They nursed them back to health and began teaching them their wisdom.  We are the 5th generation of that teaching.  We will stay here.”

Aria looked to her team.  The doctor, Bill Covey, gave a slight shake of his head.  The engineer, Elian Shapiro, brought along to assist with any repairs needed, spoke up.  “We’d love to meet the Wise Ones, Jacamo.”

Aria saw the miniscule startled reactions of the descendents.  She pounced on that, turning back to their leader.  “Indeed, Jacamo, we’d love to meet the Wise Ones.  We never expected an alien city.  All of our records say the planet was uninhabited before we established the colony.”

She waited expectantly.  Her team was surprised beyond belief when they flew over the city.  Only half the size of the current main colony town, it was totally unexpected, especially when they scanned and found human bio signs.  But the scans never reported any other bio signs, other than local wildlife.  She was beyond curious.

Jacomo’s expression never changed.  “That’s not possible, Aria.”

She clenched her fists, nails biting into her palms.  “We’ve been here two days Jacamo.  We’d love to be able to bring such a huge discovery back to the colony.  We’d like to share in the wisdom as well.”  She looked around the plaza at the descendants.  “You all have done so well here, we’d like to share that news.”

He shook his head.  “We will share the knowledge, of course.”

Aria smiled, at last, getting somewhere.

“But you cannot meet the Wise Ones.”

“Why not, Jacamo?  Are we not worthy?”

He smiled.  “You are as worthy as our forefathers, naturally.”

She frowned, glancing toward her team.  “Then why not?”

He looked at his people in the plaza; there were at least 100 of the 3000 living descendents.  “Because they left.”

Aria, her mouth open, looked to her team doctor, who just shrugged.

“When did they leave?”

“Ten years ago.”

Aria felt like she had to drag every word out of him.  “But why?  Where did they go?”

Jacamo sighed.  “They knew you were coming.  They didn’t want to interrupt our development more.  They had been studying the colony, and us.  They saw that the colony was expanding and knew this place would be found soon.  So they left.”

Aria’s heart fell; she so wanted to learn more about the aliens.  “So they just left?  In a spaceship?”

He smiled, “Oh no. They just,” he paused, “moved to a different plane.”

She could hear her team’s indrawn breath.  “To a different plane,” her voice was flat, absorbing what that could mean.  She hardly knew what to ask next.   “Will they come back?”

“No, they made their choice.  They said it was early for them, but to protect us, they’d go now.”  He looked around the plaza, smiling.  “We’re here now to carry on their work; to pass it on to you, to the rest of our people.”

The End

654 Words

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